My essay plan: I have brainstormed my easy notes on how I am going to conduct my argument and the structure of the paragraphs which contains informa
My essay plan: I have brainstormed my easy notes on how I am going to conduct my argument and the structure of the paragraphs which contains information from sources and direct quotes. I have also included my Zines plan which includes sketching the Zines on the politics of poverty, which referred directly to the easy topic.
My Essay Structure
Easy question: If Australia is the lucky country where everyone gets a fair go, is poverty in Australia a personal problem or a social problem?
Introduction: 100-words in discussing the body structures of the easy.
Introducing SACOSS on the poverty rate in Australia
Sociological perspective of system theory
The reason for me doing my easy on this topic
(~200 words)
Topic/Issue 1: What is the key role of SACOSS and the Poverty Premium Report?
Communities perspectives of social inequality
Society and poverty
Quotes from the interview
(~200 words)
Topic/Issue 2: Understanding minorities communities based on a sociological perspective of the system theory.
Approaches to social problems that fail to account for the observers can be instrumentalised by welfare bureaucracies by defining people as deviant and as a target for interventions (Michailakis, & Schirmer 2014).
Social inequality affects the individual mental stability which influences their ability to decide in society which is due to the increase in poverty level (Bowen et al 2013).
Inequality in the education system.
Australian society systems.
The values of every community in the society.
(~200 words)
Topic/Issue 3: Poverty Premium and which community poverty has affected the most.
Aboriginal communities as they are the owner of this country, and the system is not giving them equal opportunities. The challenges Indigenous communities perceived with the barriers that deprived them form social equality (Qureshi et al 2018).
The injustice the Aboriginal community face in health care is leading to high rates of death (Draper et al 2009).
Cost of living Aboriginal communities as they are the owner of this country, and the system is not giving them equal opportunities.
(~200 words)
Topic/Issue 4: How the injustice system has increased the poverty level
Australia housing policy.
Considering all communities in the Society as one.
Bringing social justice to the Indigenous communities.
Workforce.
CONCLUSION: (100 words)
Summarising the whole Argument and suggesting what solutions can be put in place to resolve the problem.
Equal opportunities.
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Jobs opportunities
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Picture/ Aboriginal flag
quotes
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Expects quotes on poverty
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Human Service Provision WELF1014: Assessment Rubric, Assignment 2
Marking Criteria Fail 2
(39-0%) Fail 1
(40-49%) Pass 2
(50-54%) Pass 1
(55-64%) Credit
(65-74%) Distinction
(75-84%) High Distinction
(85-100%)
The three criteria set out below are the key aspects of this assignment and make up the majority of the overall grade
Is it clear that the submission responds to the essay question?
Development of argument and critical thinking No connection made with the essay question
Little coherency or consistency in argument No obvious connection made with the essay question
Information presented is purely descriptive Author attempts but does not convincingly engage with the essay question.
Main points lack detailed development.
Ideas are vague with little evidence of critical thinking.
Argument is broad and does not fit the expected style of writing Author has attempted to engage with the essay question although this is not always successful.
Sometimes the information presented appears tangential
Paper is mostly descriptive and/or argument is broad At times it is clear that the author has engaged with the essay question.
Some critical thinking is present, but some areas are descriptive.
Content indicates critical thinking and reasoning applied at some points in the paper. Author has explored multiple components of the essay question and has often done so very well.
Main points well developed with quality supporting details and quantity.
Submission indicates original thinking and develops ideas with sufficient and firm evidence. Author has engaged with the essay question in a sophisticated manner, demonstrating creativity, passion and critical reflection
Main points well developed and thoroughly supported.
Demonstrates high order critical thinking.
Submission indicates synthesis of ideas, in-depth analysis and original thought
The Zine component
The Zine is the key creative aspect of this assignment No submission Submission demonstrates minimal effort eg, is constructed electronically or has no connection with the essay Zine submitted but does not appear to align with the essay submission, or demonstrates minimal effort A good effort at creating a Zine A very well constructed Zine which meets the expected standard Submission demonstrates alignment with essay and that care and creativity have been exercised throughout There is an obvious theme present in the work.
Zine and paper clearly align. Creativity of an exceptional standard present throughout.
Does the submission draw upon the course readings, resources and ideas and has feedback been utilised?
The course readings and resources have been curated to support students to meet the course learning outcomes
Does the submission demonstrate author has responded to feedback? No evidence of engagement with course readings, resources and ideas
Errors pointed out in Assignment 1 have been repeated throughout
Submission does not use the minimum of 5 peer reviewed sources
No evidence of responding to feedback Minimal evidence of engagement with course readings, resources and ideas
Errors pointed out in Assignment 1 have been repeated
Submission does not use the minimum of 5 peer reviewed sources
Minimal evidence of responding to feedback Some evidence of engagement with course readings, resources and ideas
Submission uses minimum of 5 peer reviewed sources Submission demonstrates engagement with course materials
Submission uses minimum of 5 peer reviewed sources Yes, the student has demonstrated this well Yes, this criterion has been met very well
Any errors noted or suggestions provided have been implemented
Feedback or suggestions provided have been implemented Submission demonstrates in-depth engagement with course materials and is supplemented with appropriate independent research
Any errors noted or suggestions provided have been implemented thoroughly and comprehensively
The following section sets out the expected professional standards of writing and editing
F2 F1 P2 P1 C D HD
Overall written expression, tone and language.
Paragraphing, cohesion and use of quotes
*using quotes is not compulsory, but if they are used, they must be formatted accurately and used wisely
The best writers spend as much time editing as they do writing. Often, the tone, language and expressions used do not meet the required standards.
There is little sense of a unifying topic or theme in the work.
There is no sense of flow in or between paragraphs.
Most paragraphs are generally fragmented, with little structure.
Significant amount of content consists of quoted material, with author doing little to demonstrate understanding of key concepts
Numerous grammatical errors are present, affecting the readers ability to understand the meaning of what is said.
Submission appears rushed or incomplete, with little evidence of editing Sometimes the tone, language and expressions used do not meet the required standards.
Paragraphs show little arrangement into related ideas.
There is little flow in or between paragraphs.
Many paragraphs are generally fragmented with little structure.
Significant amount of content consists of quotes, with author doing little to demonstrate understanding of key concepts
Many grammatical errors. At times the meaning of what is written is affected by these errors.
Submission appears rushed with little evidence of editing At times, the language and tone wavers away from expectations.
There are some structural inconsistencies in ordering the information.
Many paragraphs are too long and contain multiple ideas.
Many paragraphs are fragmented, short and choppy without structure.
Quotes chosen do not support the argument in the paper.
Quotes are incorrectly referenced or formatted, (for example they do not use page or paragraph numbers.
Often there are repeated grammatical errors.
More editing required Sometimes the link between sections is not clear.
Sometimes the intent of what is being argued is unclear
Paragraphs are generally divided so that they contain a single topic, although sometimes competing ideas are present in the same paragraph.
Some paragraphs are fragmented, short and choppy without structure.
Sometimes, the quotes chosen do not add weight to the focus of the submission
Quotes are incorrectly referenced or formatted, (for example they do not use page or paragraph numbers).
Some repeated grammatical errors, although generally the meaning of what is written is clear.
Most of the time, author uses respectful tone and language.
At times there is a clear flow of writing between sections.
The meaning of every passage in the paper is clear.
Most paragraphs are appropriately structured so that each contains a topic.
Most of the related ideas are appropriately located and logically ordered.
If quote/s have been used, their inclusion enhances the work.
Quotes have been formatted and referenced accurately.
Some minor grammatical errors.
The supportive points and examples are grouped logically, and there are clear signposts creating a flow of writing.
Clear and precise language deployed throughout.
All paragraphs are appropriately structured so that each contains a topic and most of the related ideas are appropriately located and logically ordered.
Good work with incorporating quoted material.
Few grammatical errors. Obvious that the author has spent time editing their paper Author uses respectful tone and language throughout.
Strikes a balance between developing an argument and engaging the reader.
The use of language is simple and effective.
All paragraphs are appropriately structured and logically ordered.
The flow between and in paragraphs is impressive.
Any direct quotes used enhance the argument, are correctly formatted and fit seamlessly within the authors own writing.
No grammatical errors. Obvious that the author has spent time and care editing their paper thoroughly
The following section sets out the expected standards around referencing and Academic Integrity
Research and referencing
No reference list present.
No ideas, facts or opinions are referenced.
No evidence of incorporating feedback from assignment 1
Multiple citations in the reference list are not present in the paper
Few referenced ideas, facts or opinions.
A lot of inappropriate attribution of referenced material.
Many references in the list are not used in the text or vice-versa
Reference list is poorly presented and formatted.
Author does not utilise enough appropriate, peer-reviewed literature.
Some citations in the reference list that are not present in the paper
Some sources providing facts and statistics are irrelevant
There are large gaps in referencing and/or inappropriate attribution of referenced material (eg there are citations in the reference list that are not present in the paper or vice versa)
Many sources cited are tangential and do not relate to the argument being made.
Some references in the list are not used in the text or vice-versa.
Some sources providing facts and statistics are too old to reflect current trends, or are not location specific
There are some gaps in referencing.
Sometimes there was inappropriate attribution of referenced material.
Some sources are tangential and do not relate to the argument being made.
All references in the paper are present in the reference list, although there are some formatting errors and/or information missing.
If statistics are used, their relevance is unclear Most ideas or facts are attributed.
Obvious that author has carried out independent research to support their work.
A relevant set of sources used to support the paper.
A good reference list, but there is room for improvement
If statistics are used, their relevance is clear References all of the appropriate ideas and facts within the essay.
Independent research has resulted in a rigorous paper, with all references incorporated into the paper.
Reference list utilises appropriate references throughout.
The reference list is almost perfect,
with all details included,
contains only minor formatting errors
If statistics are used, their inclusion adds weight to the argument being made in the paper
Demonstrates a sophisticated use of academic sources and factual information.
Author synthesises ideas from a number of sources, these are combined seamlessly and flawlessly into the paper.
Reference list includes a wide range of appropriate references.
The reference list is perfectly constructed and formatted with all details included.
If statistics are used, they are appropriate, relevant, recent and explained well
Academic Integrity
Clear evidence that material has been directly copied and pasted from another source, with or without acknowledgement Poor attention paid to properly acknowledging sources used to support the argument Well done, your paper is respectful of academic integrity throughout
Meeting deadlines Your paper was submitted xx days late without an extension; therefore xx marks have been deducted Well done for submitting your work on time
General Comments and Mark:
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Grade Notion Descriptor
High Distinction HD 85 100 Exemplary competency in all criteria
Distinction D 75 84 Higher level competency all criteria PLUS exemplary competency on most criteria
Credit C 65 74 Basic competence all criteria PLUS demonstrates higher level competency on some criteria
P1 55 64 Basic competence in all criteria.
P2 50 54 Basic competence on most criteria. Some requirements for pass may be reached and others widely missed.
F1 40 49 Insufficient competence on some criteria. Deficiencies in meeting Pass requirements
F2 Below 40 Competence not demonstrated on most criteria. Requirements for Pass clearly not met.
